Neat and Tidy? In The Domitory?(Revised Version2.3)

      Living outside is filled of freedom and lacked of management(At least freer than living home). It could be even considered as the first step to depart from the protection of parents and familiar home. Domitory is not only a place offers students a shelter and shared with room-mates, and it is also a place which tests students' will power to control themselves.
      Howevr, it is hard for some students to mantain clean and tidy in the domitory, and this kind of behavior not only lack of responsibility but also result in a dirty environment.Many students focused on their social life in their schools or colleges, or some keen in online games and suffering internet.
This makes they ignore they live in a garbage dump.

      Take one of the boy domitory in NCU for example, two English-department inhabitants called Chad and Rorbert live in it indicated that it was untoleratable to see there were always someone throw packs of garbage on the corridor and bathroom only for their convenience.
      This also derivatives the problem of arbovirus and odour,too. People had to suffocate when they went to bthroom. They complained that bathroom was unusable before the adminster of the domitory warned to make public the people who throw the garbage.
      This kind of behavior is unbearable, and it not only depressed the impression of inhabitants. More over, this will indirecty affect our health condition. This is a serious question we should face forward.

Comment:
     1.The first paragraph is full of repeated sentences
        and has nothing to do with the article.
   
     2.The interviewees' opinions should be describe much more than the former version.
    
     3.The phenomenon that arbovirus and odour result in should be described more detailed.